Monday, August 8, 2011

Magpie tale #77



I knew before he ever opened his mouth. Word gets around in this small town. He's been seeing Mabel Sanchez behind my back, taking her to lookout point after he drops me off before 9pm. I can't help it if my parents are strict. But I guess what he really wanted was a lover's lane lust-mate. I cut him short, before he could actually break it off with me. Instead I leaned myself back on the porch railing and stretched my long, smooth- skinned, just shaved, legs before him. "Look Charlie," I said,leaning my arms backwards resting them on the porch rail,pushing my breasts forward into the porch light, "You got to understand, I don't want to do this, but I have to. I don't want to see you anymore. I have plans, big plans, and they don't include the likes of you. I want ...out of this town and away from small town people like you and Mabel Sanchez. So you go ahead and keep seeing your little girl friend, ain't no matter to me. I'm going places. "
And that's when my dad rapped on the window for me to come in. "Bye Charlie,"I said,shilly shallying my be-hind into the house and closing the door.
My father looked out of the window and watched Charlie drive off, then turned to me and asked,newspaper in hand,
"Too bad what happened to that poor Sanchez girl...but I guess she died instantly, did you know her?"


MAGPIE TALE #77

21 comments:

  1. she should get going soon before Charlie puts two and two together...

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  2. oh my...did I write that? :)

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  3. What a post Suz, it made me smile thinking of you writing this great little tale!

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  4. well maybe she has a reason for getting out of dodge..nice suz..like the twists!!!

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  5. agree with Brian....I would leave too...great twist here...bkm

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  6. Such a great twist, Suz..no wonder she needs to get out of town.

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  7. Wow, Suz, wow!! Great magpie.

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  8. Whoa..I didn't see that coming..very interesting end!

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  9. I have to confess....that's not my intended ending
    rather I wanted her to feel guilt over how she treated this young man
    who may or may not have known about Mabel's death at the time....

    funny how what we think we are writing is not there...only in our heads
    But I guess it made for a good magpie anyway...thanks all

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  10. Wow, what a twist..I told you he was no good!! Guess we can spot 'em...

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  11. Are you going to leave us hanging?!

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  12. I guess I better get out my murder pen
    ...by demand

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  13. I got it as you thought you wrote it.

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  14. ah Audrey..it must be the Lutheran in us

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  15. Interesting twist at the end. So how did Mabel die? Great tale.

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  16. oh Suz, on a different set-up but this is excellent. I can relate to this story. Wish i can be as brave as her. I dont have big dreams. i only have a very simple attainable dreams with the person i would love to spend the est of my life with and he to me too...

    I love it very much!

    JJRod'z

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  17. Solid, twist-ended work - good stuff.

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