I found this photo in a locked box
shoved in the back of my father's bureau.
I recognized the watch right away....he left it to my oldest son
and the raincoat was my mother's.
But who was the man standing, arms crossed protectively
over his chest,long black hair hitting his shoulders in a perky flip?
my father...my father...my father
The shadow
of the man
I never knew
It was locked away
locked away
....locked away
wow- this has quite the twist! Well done!
ReplyDeleteOne of your best, Suz!!
ReplyDeleteYes, an excellent, heartbreaking take on the prompt!
ReplyDeletenice...you added so much mystery to this...like it and def would want to hear more..
ReplyDeleteWow.
ReplyDeleteSuch mystery!
You took us to the inner workings of a main character with much to tell. this fascinated me. Made me want more of the story.
ReplyDeletethe repetition makes it haunting.
ReplyDeletesecrets haunt families for eternity
ReplyDeletegreat response
At least unfocused- and lacking detail- good one! thanks.
ReplyDeleteAs always, this is another best!
ReplyDeleteMerry Christmas and a Prosperous New Year!..
JJRod'z
Face it, Suz; you can write...
ReplyDeleteWhy Sir Berowne....you have just made me cry...thank you
ReplyDeleteSad, sad, sad story. :( ... Dads are often shadows.
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Achingly beautiful writing here.
ReplyDeleteTo know the objects but not the man.
Poignant... one feels the sadness and ache of loss and longing.
ReplyDeleteThis is quite a set-up..I really want to know more..and so does she, poor soul! Love it...
ReplyDeleteOh my.... Intrigue intrigue intrigue! This tells the story of other stories that need to be told! Excellent!
ReplyDeleteWow -- a whole novel here, Suz!
ReplyDeleteLove this viewpoint!
ReplyDeleteI like it Suz!
ReplyDeleteWow Suz....what a powerful take on the prompt!!!
ReplyDeleteCool story layered on a mysterious image -- well done!
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