Sunday, December 18, 2011

Shadow Man...Magpietale # 96

I found this photo in a locked box
shoved in the back of my father's bureau.
I recognized the watch right away....he left it to my oldest son
and the raincoat was my mother's.
But who was the man standing, arms crossed protectively
over his chest,long black hair hitting his shoulders in a perky flip?
my father...my father...my father

The shadow
of the man
 I never knew
It was locked away
                       locked away
                                            ....locked away


23 comments:

  1. wow- this has quite the twist! Well done!

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  2. Yes, an excellent, heartbreaking take on the prompt!

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  3. nice...you added so much mystery to this...like it and def would want to hear more..

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  4. You took us to the inner workings of a main character with much to tell. this fascinated me. Made me want more of the story.

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  5. the repetition makes it haunting.

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  6. secrets haunt families for eternity
    great response

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  7. At least unfocused- and lacking detail- good one! thanks.

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  8. As always, this is another best!

    Merry Christmas and a Prosperous New Year!..

    JJRod'z

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  9. Why Sir Berowne....you have just made me cry...thank you

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  10. Sad, sad, sad story. :( ... Dads are often shadows.

    (rosemarymint.wordpress.com)

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  11. Achingly beautiful writing here.
    To know the objects but not the man.

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  12. Poignant... one feels the sadness and ache of loss and longing.

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  13. This is quite a set-up..I really want to know more..and so does she, poor soul! Love it...

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  14. Oh my.... Intrigue intrigue intrigue! This tells the story of other stories that need to be told! Excellent!

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  15. Wow Suz....what a powerful take on the prompt!!!

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  16. Cool story layered on a mysterious image -- well done!

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