Really enjoyed your slightly ironic use of the word "remembered". Strange how we remember beliefs in a moment of crisis! Great little haiku/microfiction!
Janean....ah I see your drawing of the fish..sister thank you for commenting...I know you are so busy with the new house..I appreciate it truly I do My labor day was spent with my hubby doing nothing but being together on this glorious summer day
Beautiful haiku, Suz. Is the wonderful image a woodcut? My prayers go out to those in Hurricane Earl's path.
ReplyDeleteWonderfully efficient use of words.
ReplyDeleteThe Best!
ReplyDeleteYou married the image with your words so well ...........
ReplyDeletewonderful.
ReplyDeleteyou have a great gift with words.
enjoy you day and dance a little...
You are just too clever! What a great haiku! I love it, Pat! Enjoy the rest of your holiday weekend!
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Pat;
ReplyDeleteI love the haiku, really wonderful succession of the words!
Nice take too!
Have a great rest of your Holiday !
Can't think of a better place to call out for help from.
ReplyDeleteMy first try at Micro-Fiction Monday is up.
PG
A lovely haiku and I like 'to the remembered God', at times like this I think even non-believers might turn to God.
ReplyDeleteWow--quite an impact in only 70 characters! I like it. Have a great week. Cheers!
ReplyDeleteVery nice senryū, Suz! :)
ReplyDeleteAnother 70 words (Goodness!) and you could have God's answer for us.
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Very good!
ReplyDeleteHe made the right call...
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moon smiles
mine is Here
Let's hope they did! Great microfiction.
ReplyDeleteHave a wonderful week, Suz.
I hope they answer.
ReplyDeleteNice one.
I like this suz, especially 'remembered god'.
ReplyDeleteSo glad you got me interested in joining in with these, I love it! :-)
Susannah x
Mine is here - http://panopticulated.blogspot.com/
Really enjoyed your slightly ironic use of the word "remembered". Strange how we remember beliefs in a moment of crisis! Great little haiku/microfiction!
ReplyDeleteIf there was ever a time for it . . . this would be the time.
ReplyDeleteNothing like an impending disaster to make you look for a higher power. :)
ReplyDeleteWonderful haiku--a complete story in just 70 characters! This is a great one, Suz.
ReplyDeletePowerful. This one is so powerful!
ReplyDeleteThis is really good Suz, thought provoking and so real.
ReplyDeletevery smooth flow,
ReplyDeletelovely lines.
Very good:)
ReplyDelete"You never call, you never write, and now you want something? *sigh*"
ReplyDeleteGreat entry!
Oh replicant...you are so funny
ReplyDeletewho? simon peter? naw, that's not fiction....
ReplyDeletei'm off to read more of SUZ!!!!!
hope your labor day was peaceful.
Janean....ah I see your drawing of the fish..sister
ReplyDeletethank you for commenting...I know you are so busy with the new house..I appreciate it truly I do
My labor day was spent with my hubby doing nothing but being together on this glorious summer day
Very nice response to the picture, Like that old saying, "There are no atheists in foxholes."
ReplyDeleteSuz, you do an amazing job with so few characters! May hat's off to you.
ReplyDeleteHave a great week.
Just love your poem!
ReplyDeletebut disagree with the dialogue.
As a sailor, I know the correct nautical terms for these things. He more likely said: "Oh shit!"
now you made me laugh
ReplyDeleteyou are a very good writer and I am an appreciator of good writing.
ReplyDeleteDonna, thank you for taking the time to say such a nice thing..an encouraging wind that graces me
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Wonderful idea expressed in so few words. When all else fails, perhaps all that is left, is "remembered God?" And thanks for speaking of my pump.
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