Friday, August 20, 2010

Magpie tale #28



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Using the below photo
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Sandy's beautifully red painted toes were getting pruney and the bubbles were all but gone. The water was now cold, despite the rising heat of her anger. He wasn't coming. He wasn't going to celebrate her birthday in the tub of bubbles with her-two slick bodies rubbing together in the perfect birthday gift.
He said he was working late and would try to be home by 8. A quick glance at the clock told her he was more than late, he was a no- show, again. It wasn't enough that she had shed those extra pounds she had put on,it wasn't enough that she had revamped her wardrobe or cut back her work hours, he was somewhere else and probably with someone else. The lingering candlelight flickered on the wall like a message written by some ancient Goddess--It isn't you,it's him
She raised her toes to the faucet and thought of the old TV show where Lucy gets her big toe stuck in the spout...and for a second, Sandy forgot her hurt and anger and laughed. But she had no Ricky Ricardo. She had a lying,cheating son-of-a -bitch. So instead she lifted the lever to drain the tub,knowing she would have to pull the plug on this marriage,too.

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magpie tale of fiction #28




25 comments:

  1. Good for her! She doesn't need to put up with that crap LOL. As you can tell, I enjoyed this magpie. I'm trying to help her feel righteous instead of sad :)

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  2. Oh no she's feeling empowered..the bum!

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  3. One of those sad but true stories..and what a sensible gal she turned out to be..rooting for her!!

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  4. I so remember that Lucy show and it always made me nervous that it might happen to me and my toe.
    Good piece, sorry I got to laughing about the Lucy show too!

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  5. She should use those bubbles to drown him.

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  6. I had conflicting emotions ... good for her and sad for her.

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  7. there are some important life decisions one can make in a bath tub…he's not worth waiting for - unless he really has to work…

    my magpie is here

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  8. Nice one. Goof for her, no-one needs to be treated that way.

    Loved the reference to Lucy, I loved that show.

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  9. oh i feel for her, there on the edge of reality...who could pass up a bubble bath experience like that...i want a big tub...smiles. nice magpie!

    my magpie

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  10. Suz,
    Awesome story telling Suz, I have a violet towel fresh from the warming rack for her!
    rel

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  11. well written,
    he may not be with someone else,
    she lacks confidence or trust, which leads to dissatisfaction on both sides...

    loved your smooth flow....

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  12. Yep...that is definitely what she needs to do.

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  13. Go Sandy!!!!!
    And girl, get yourself some red shoes:)

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  14. Well written - I am pleased that she realised that he wasn't worth wasting time for and pulled the plug and the him along with the bath water.

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  15. wow, the things people realize in the tub. good for her. a very well written piece, very compact but brimming with great flow attention snagging lines.

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  16. I'm glad she came to that realization. She'll be much happier without him.


    www.angiemuresan.com

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  17. Hey! If she felt she had to shed pounds and hours for him, the plug should have been pulled long ago, or um...maybe never removed in the first place! Oops!

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  18. I've said it before - MAN! You've got talent.

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  19. Dear Suz,
    WOW. There's one angry [and now sexier...] angry betrayed woman!

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  20. resigned to do what she had to.

    you create such a strong visual. WOW!!!

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  21. This piece makes me sad. There's more to know and realize--a good thing in the writing--I am always sad to hear about splits. The beginnings are almost always so bright and hopeful. The hopeless romantic in me wants everything to turn out well. Hope she finds her happy ending somewhere. Good story - Thanks.

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