We'd like to be a vessel full of life, but then there is the occasional running on empty.
oh my...sad old man....maybe he needs a drink of water!Seriously-this is so simply well done
Good one, Suz....after mowing the grass this afternoon, I feel just what that old man felt!! Rick
Paul..vessels full of life...like that!Kathew...worn out old man..Rick...I hear ya
Oooooohh! That's a tough one, Suz. Great job!
Very vivid! A story in few words.
I like this Magpie Suz
A great job on this one. A vivid word picture!
Short but full of meaning.Christine
That just about says it all. Know the feeling :)
That is so sad! But you've done it so well.www.angiemuresan.com
A few words but very expressive !Nice day, Suz !Sylvia
wow, really wonderful haiku, def one of my fave i've seen around here. either a haiku has it, or it doesn't, and this one is great. beautiful image.
For such a short poem, it was incredibly poignant and alive. Great job.
Love what you did with the prompt...simple yet profound.Awesome writing! :-)
Patience..I appreciate your commenthaiku is almost unattainableit's what's not said that mattersand of course the season...Aoife.Troxel..Sylvia.thank you Angie...I don't know about well, haiku is difficult in it's traditional form...but I like trying thanks
Wow.Suz, this I feel is my favourite among your magpies.It's tight and yet, conveys volumes.Such a strong magpie!
This is really good - makes me think of my husband (the Watering Man) at the end of the day when he's finished watering the garden. Kaput!
happy one...I have one like that...haHappy one...so you caught the thread of this one..it is sad.thanks
Hi Suz! A very emotional and well written Magpie haiku!
WOW, I say through the tears. I know just how he feels.Your words are perfect.
oh suz...this is perfect! it gets right to the point but it paints a huge picture with those carefully chosen words! bravo, my friend!
This is lovely, and a little sad.
I've felt that way after a morning in the garden... Terrific haiku, Suz!
Sad... but lovely...
The old man was just tired... He was full of memories and wisdom, but you really knew that! Simple and sad, sentiment and poem. LOL.
This is poignant and tender and simply wonderful.
i can only hope at the end of my life is can claim empty....poured out on the next generations flowers...
WHy Brian you have just written a poem...wonderful commentStafford...I'm feeling a bit of that ...but yes you are right empty..empty as job done....but also full ...a growing garden left in the wake
You sure said a lot in just 14 words. Perfect.
You amaze me with what comes out of your thoughts. I would have never thought of haiku for this one, but you sure did!
suz, you never stop surprising me! how you can take 14 words and paint the rest of the picture.... amazing.
So poignant..in so few words...
I tried to think of a clever comment but I'm me. So all I can say is you have a very sensitive soul.
powerful! i love your Mr. Darcy, also. I myself have an all black little one named Frankie. something about their spirits are adorable!
Perfection, lovely Magpie and a very vivid picture with so few words.
Aw. I hope that, when I am old, I do not feel empty. I don't think I will. As the body fails, the soul can still grow stronger and more beautiful. I believe that.
This really is a lonely image. Your words beautifully emphasize this.
Fireblossom..spoken like a young woman...good!
Short, and so packed with meaning. Well done!
Ooh, I like this! It's amazing what a vivid picture such few words paint.
This one packs a wallop. Thank you.Elizabeth
i do not want to be empty either...i better fill up this old can..before it is to late...you sent everyone thinking about their life....blessings...bkm
So sad! I think of my grandfather, who just sits in his garden, on good days...
Suz,a little waterbrings a riot of reward.A haiku in bloom.rel
rel....why that's good
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