Thursday, February 24, 2011

Microfiction # 71 -Committed

microfiction # 71

Writing prompt
from Susan at:
http://www.stonyriver.ie/                                                                                            



Life like a long hallway
Little shafts of light
from brief opened doors
Darkness snares his feet
and he stops, never reaching
a life

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12 comments:

  1. "Darkness snares his feet" is an incredible line.
    Wonderful piece, suz.

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  2. I agree with Michael - it's a wonderful line.
    Very nice, suz!

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  3. Michael, you know that word came in revising
    revising you say..of a microfiction..sick isn't it
    thank you
    Jabblog..why thank you...mental illness is a snaring thing isn't it
    afterall...

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  4. Suz, you have some mind! Great story.

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  5. So few words, so much to think about! Love it...It makes me think about an installation I saw once about a old hotel in Seattle.

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  6. Oh yes, mental institutions are just awful...would visit my mother and have that sick feeling never leaves....could not watch One Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest...you describe the walls well...bkm

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  7. Darkness snares his feet..perfect, so visual and full of emotion..quite sad to stop...

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  8. This wee piece really made me stop and think. I read it and re-read it. How sad it must be when darkness wins.

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  9. Very, very nice! Don't let the dark hold you!

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  10. this is one case when i would run to the light...nicely played.

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  11. Wow...what an interesting picture.
    Reminds me of a school hallway.
    Love the words you put to it.
    Have a nice weekend.
    Hugs, Dogwood

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