Wednesday, September 21, 2011

Serpent of Notes/ Magpie #83


                                                     a prompt from Tess, at Willow Manor


 Notes

I saw his shadowy form and was afraid,
listened as he played a reed,
watched as serpents slid out of trees,
out of water,wrapped themselves
around his naked darkness.
The light of night hung in the sky behind him
illuminating a path under his feet.
I stood in the sound, wanting to be like it.
The serpent of notes plunged into  my ears,
calling me to my belly to crawl to him
 who played what I desired
...an apple at his feet


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17 comments:

  1. i stood in the sound wanting to be like it....hot line suz....

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  2. The seductress and the seduced...you've told a story of dualities, and it's hot!

    Rick

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  3. What an evocative write! Love that ending.

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  4. Seductive and moving. Great Magpie.

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  5. Very good, Suz! Loved the idea of the apple, takes us immediately to another Garden where snake played an important role!

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  6. Wonderful sister! Although i have to read it thrice... Nosebleeding... LOL! :-)

    JJRod'z

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  7. Mmm - I like it! Especially the part where the serpent of notes plunged into your ears...

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  8. Suz,
    This is good, intense and a great read!

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  9. The light of night hung in the sky behind him

    An no doubt dazzled her eyes! Great Magpie, thanks.

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  10. an apple at his feet,

    ....

    every and each line is divine.
    truly powerful magpie.

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  11. Wow! What a great, erotic read. Yes images of another garden come to my mind too..

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