a prompt from Tess, at Willow Manor
Notes
I saw his shadowy form and was afraid,
listened as he played a reed,
watched as serpents slid out of trees,
out of water,wrapped themselves
around his naked darkness.
The light of night hung in the sky behind him
illuminating a path under his feet.
I stood in the sound, wanting to be like it.
The serpent of notes plunged into my ears,
calling me to my belly to crawl to him
who played what I desired
...an apple at his feet
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i stood in the sound wanting to be like it....hot line suz....
ReplyDeleteThe seductress and the seduced...you've told a story of dualities, and it's hot!
ReplyDeleteRick
What an evocative write! Love that ending.
ReplyDeleteSeductive and moving. Great Magpie.
ReplyDeleteOoooo Suz, Great story.
ReplyDeleteVery good, Suz! Loved the idea of the apple, takes us immediately to another Garden where snake played an important role!
ReplyDeleteEnticing notes:)
ReplyDeleteTruly Super Magpie!
Wonderful sister! Although i have to read it thrice... Nosebleeding... LOL! :-)
ReplyDeleteJJRod'z
Wow! Wonderful write!
ReplyDeleteOooooooh!
ReplyDeleteMmm - I like it! Especially the part where the serpent of notes plunged into your ears...
ReplyDeleteSuz,
ReplyDeleteThis is good, intense and a great read!
Very good.
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
The light of night hung in the sky behind him
ReplyDeleteAn no doubt dazzled her eyes! Great Magpie, thanks.
an apple at his feet,
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every and each line is divine.
truly powerful magpie.
Lovely write, Suz...
ReplyDeleteWow! What a great, erotic read. Yes images of another garden come to my mind too..
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