Monday, January 2, 2012

Magpie tales # 98 Raging River

In the aftermath
I remember the destruction of your love
your torrent of  words
your irreparable erosion of  banks
your toppling of timbers
 into splinters of kindling
of despair


I could be tempted to be fooled
by the stillness of the reflection
you seek to whisper to me now
ignore the debris you left behind
travel the river of your love again
but I won't
for still waters
run deep, they say
and I ain't no fool

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26 comments:

  1. "your toppling of timbers into splinters of kindling" nice line, terrific interpretation

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  2. I love every word, every feeling, every line, everything..

    JJrod'z

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  3. i'm with JJ..every morsel was a delight ..it really touched me..been there!!xx

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  4. perfect- I think we've all had this experience..

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  5. I love this Suz, I agree with JJ I also felt it the whole thing.

    Well done.

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  6. thought there are plenty that jump right back in ...nice write suz

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  7. neat, love the ending.

    have a lovely new year.

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  8. Your description of destruction is keen and on the emotional mark. You do a great job using the imagery in the photo to infer the inner truths disclosed.

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  9. Odd to think that river ever raged.....
    You brought a totally different image to my eye.....
    Excellent!

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  10. What a start to 2012 Suz... Love it!

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  11. "Splinters of kindling of despair".
    Good that she learned the lesson!...

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  12. That last line is a killer! Loved this.

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  13. Great use of the prompt as a metaphor for your poem.

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  14. "And I'm no fool" something to cheer about after all the destructive emotion! Well done...

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  15. I like how you take a serene image and "read" between the lines, and how that serenity becomes something almost sinister... And your ending is the perfect punch!

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  16. lots of feeling in your words...thanks for sharing

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  17. You certainly are no fool Suz! Love this one...hope you have a happy New Year! :-)

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  18. It's all settled, you are wiser. Yes, nothing like experience to teach us lessons.

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  19. Oh, great imagery. Nicely done!

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  20. A stellar piece - slice of life that strikes at the root!

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  21. Ooooooh! This was amazing! My favorite one so far! Excellent write! :)

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