In the aftermath
I remember the destruction of your love
your torrent of words
your irreparable erosion of banks
your toppling of timbers
into splinters of kindling
of despair
I could be tempted to be fooled
by the stillness of the reflection
you seek to whisper to me now
ignore the debris you left behind
travel the river of your love again
but I won't
for still waters
run deep, they say
and I ain't no fool
http://magpietales.blogspot.com/
I remember the destruction of your love
your torrent of words
your irreparable erosion of banks
your toppling of timbers
into splinters of kindling
of despair
I could be tempted to be fooled
by the stillness of the reflection
you seek to whisper to me now
ignore the debris you left behind
travel the river of your love again
but I won't
for still waters
run deep, they say
and I ain't no fool
http://magpietales.blogspot.com/
"your toppling of timbers into splinters of kindling" nice line, terrific interpretation
ReplyDeleteI love every word, every feeling, every line, everything..
ReplyDeleteJJrod'z
i'm with JJ..every morsel was a delight ..it really touched me..been there!!xx
ReplyDeleteperfect- I think we've all had this experience..
ReplyDeleteI love this Suz, I agree with JJ I also felt it the whole thing.
ReplyDeleteWell done.
thought there are plenty that jump right back in ...nice write suz
ReplyDeleteneat, love the ending.
ReplyDeletehave a lovely new year.
Your description of destruction is keen and on the emotional mark. You do a great job using the imagery in the photo to infer the inner truths disclosed.
ReplyDeleteOdd to think that river ever raged.....
ReplyDeleteYou brought a totally different image to my eye.....
Excellent!
love how you ended it..
ReplyDeleteWhat a start to 2012 Suz... Love it!
ReplyDelete"Splinters of kindling of despair".
ReplyDeleteGood that she learned the lesson!...
That last line is a killer! Loved this.
ReplyDeleteYes, what a delight!
ReplyDeleteGreat use of the prompt as a metaphor for your poem.
ReplyDeletePowerful! I love this.
ReplyDelete"And I'm no fool" something to cheer about after all the destructive emotion! Well done...
ReplyDeleteI like how you take a serene image and "read" between the lines, and how that serenity becomes something almost sinister... And your ending is the perfect punch!
ReplyDeletelots of feeling in your words...thanks for sharing
ReplyDeleteYou certainly are no fool Suz! Love this one...hope you have a happy New Year! :-)
ReplyDeleteSo real!
ReplyDeleteIt's all settled, you are wiser. Yes, nothing like experience to teach us lessons.
ReplyDeleteOh... this is REALLY good.
ReplyDeleteOh, great imagery. Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteA stellar piece - slice of life that strikes at the root!
ReplyDeleteOoooooh! This was amazing! My favorite one so far! Excellent write! :)
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