Willow hosts at weekly meme
You will die this Autumn
while the earth breaks forth
in glorious displays of death
or sleep
And the rain will come
as it always does this time of year
as will my tears
carving ridges into my heartbroken
being
And freezing cold will set in
taking the last remnants of beauty away
I brace myself for the frosty nights ahead
when I will taste the bitter cold of your absence
and my joy will be darkened
like the short days of this season
Let it be a cloudy, windy day
when you return
your breath to the Creator
when you leave me like the robins
whose songs I will long to hear
For it will already be desolate
winter
in my heart
I can so relate to this not on the love part but mainly on the winter part. My first Magpie #19 is kind of along these lines and then I try really hard to change my thinking and Magpie #62 is a little better. I loved your poem. It spoke to me.
ReplyDeleteOh Suz ... I can feel the sadness and despair oozing from your poem. True and honest your Magpie!
ReplyDeleteOh dear! Such loss in this lament. You really have truthfully expressed the desolation.
ReplyDeletePS. thank you for the gift of this little poem
"as the leaves fall like years
yes the truth
makes winter easier"
Then comes spring and renewal, my wish for you.
Oh dear Stafford, I feel the depths to be able to feel the heights of joy
ReplyDeletethank you wise man who knows about such things
This poem takes me to the depths of sadness which is almost palpable, an autumn sadness leading to winter.
ReplyDeleteThis was so well written I could feel the sadness.
ReplyDeleteWell done Suz
Wonderful writing, well done Suz!
ReplyDeletesuch longing!
ReplyDeleteyou will hear those songs again...you will find peace
Sadness now is part of the joy to come. Beautiful thoughts, Suz.
ReplyDeleteso very very sad- I wish for you a Spring of JOY.
ReplyDelete... so deeply and very beautifully written!
ReplyDeleteand thank you for popping by via my lovely sisters blog and leaving such a lovely comment :o)
Deborah...I claim her as sister too
ReplyDeletein a kindred sister way..thanks for your kind words
Oh Suz this just griped at my heart...i think this is one of my favorites of your poems...truly beautifully written...i love it!
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Oh Carrie..thank you...I cried buckets writing it...but it was good
ReplyDeletesuper smooth word flow..
ReplyDeletewell constructed magpie!
What a powerful poem. Words like this won't form to often. I really feel it.
ReplyDeleteSuch a poignant poem, really heartbreaking.
ReplyDeleteInvite you to try the prompts at Writer's Island...
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