Sunday, July 18, 2010

Microfiction

Susan, at http://www.stonyriver.ie/ hosts a writing challenge each Monday. Using the below photo, write something using 140 characters.
This is microfiction # 40



Jan brought the kids today. Little Zoe gave me flowers and Tim gave me his toy lobster.
But the gift I wait for is my son's forgiveness.

-140-characters of fiction



15 comments:

  1. So few words, yet it says so much!

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  2. Oh, this one has a shocking and unexpected ending. Wonderful point of view! It made my eyes open a little wider. Great story, Suz!

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  3. Suz;

    Was a surprise for me too.
    Really says it all!
    Have a good week Suz.

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  4. This was a surprising ending. I don't know what to add.

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  5. Ah, you did take us by surprise today! A really great, creative take on the picture, Suz. Interesting how we can all find so many different interpretations of the same pic! I love it! Have a great week!

    Sylvia

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  6. Ouch. I've gone for psychosculpture this week in my story

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  7. Love how your microfiction moves from the ordinary to the extraordinary! Beautiful and sensitive!

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  8. Nice story. I want to know the rest of that one.

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  9. Ahhh...forgiveness. One of the healing balms for the soul. All funny stuff aside, I hope it comes soon.

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  10. That one left me wanting more. Great path to take this one down.

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  11. Great story, Suz. I'm left wanting to know more!

    Have a lovely week x

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  12. You took me in a totally unexpected direction!

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  13. Nice depth to this entry. Well done.

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  14. Great story, Suz, with a proper punch in the gut ending. Amazing how you did it in just 140 characters!

    Have a great week.

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  15. I loved this tremendously - helped me look at the other party in divorces better.

    Actually, it is amazing that you packed so much emotion into this short MFM!

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